I didn't really care for the first two instances of their coming together, I admit; something about them feels a little off. In the first instance, I think it's because in later sections, you show a Jack that's very perceptive and sensitive to how his crew is feeling, and he doesn't seem so in "misreading" Ianto, nor do I see how even Ianto as unreliable narrator makes it work. In the second, it just seems... almost cruel, and I don't quite buy it as a kind of "sexual healing." It seems too much, too soon.
In spite of that, it works for me very well, overall. And I really enjoy the revelation that seeing Lisa isn't just a dream, and isn't something Ianto alone sees. From the third encounter on, I like how it moves emotionally, into the playfulness we saw in the stopwatch encounter. And I love the end most of all, the way he's not ready to let her go, that you don't try and sell it as somehow he can let Lisa go, because now he has Jack (although there is an element of that, and it works), but more... Jack has given him the room to be able to stand back and see that he can't hold on, that he is the one doing the holding on, and that it's bad for him, as well as Lisa.
And I do like your Jack, I like that he is sensitive to his people, that Ianto can make him go slack-mouthed, that in the end, though, he's still a mystery. You do a great job with that.
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Date: 2006-12-12 03:18 am (UTC)I didn't really care for the first two instances of their coming together, I admit; something about them feels a little off. In the first instance, I think it's because in later sections, you show a Jack that's very perceptive and sensitive to how his crew is feeling, and he doesn't seem so in "misreading" Ianto, nor do I see how even Ianto as unreliable narrator makes it work. In the second, it just seems... almost cruel, and I don't quite buy it as a kind of "sexual healing." It seems too much, too soon.
In spite of that, it works for me very well, overall. And I really enjoy the revelation that seeing Lisa isn't just a dream, and isn't something Ianto alone sees. From the third encounter on, I like how it moves emotionally, into the playfulness we saw in the stopwatch encounter. And I love the end most of all, the way he's not ready to let her go, that you don't try and sell it as somehow he can let Lisa go, because now he has Jack (although there is an element of that, and it works), but more... Jack has given him the room to be able to stand back and see that he can't hold on, that he is the one doing the holding on, and that it's bad for him, as well as Lisa.
And I do like your Jack, I like that he is sensitive to his people, that Ianto can make him go slack-mouthed, that in the end, though, he's still a mystery. You do a great job with that.
So... thank you! I enjoyed that tremendously.