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giddygeek ([personal profile] giddygeek) wrote2007-07-04 01:08 pm
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Okay, so, I have declared my independence from the mad world of BBQs and am spending the day at home, writing ficlets. Win!

[livejournal.com profile] misspamela asked for 300 words of Patrick/Pete smut, and she's getting--this. *G* First time fic, 700 words, adult.



We're the places that we wanted to go.


"Oh," Patrick says, when Pete's all the way in. "That's."

"Kind of," Pete says, agreeing. "You okay?"

Patrick isn't, really. It doesn't hurt like he'd thought it might, but it feels weird, and it's freaking him out a little.

He can't seem to turn his brain off, either. He keeps thinking: this is Pete, inside him. This is Pete's dick that's been flashed all over the internet and the subject of a hundred interviews and Patrick knows it best from years spent trying not to look at it. Pete is wearing the condom they'd put on him together, fingers bumping and slick with the lube; this is a condom they'd taken out of the huge box they'd bought a couple states back and made into water balloons that Pete had chucked at Gabe from the side of the stage.

It's massively, horribly surreal, and there's a second where Patrick thinks, I need to get away, and then Pete is resting his weight on his forearms and dropping his head to kiss Patrick wetly, catching the corner of his mouth, and he's saying, "Patrick?"

It's not the way Pete's dick moves inside him that makes his skin go hot and his spine go liquid for a moment, it's the slide of Pete's belly against his, it's Pete's arm against his side and Pete's mouth brushing his again. It's the way he'd said Patrick's name, like normal, like him being inside Patrick doesn't make anything different, doesn't change anything that them being Pete and Patrick can't fix.

"Okay," Patrick says, decision made and made again. He doesn't know exactly what to do to show Pete that it is okay, mostly okay now; his hips shift restlessly under the strange weight of Pete against them and he wonders if tightening his thighs is the way to go, or if he should spread them more. His hands skate against the slick skin of Pete's back, feeling the solid flex of muscle as Pete pushes into them, and he doesn't know if he should be touching like this, or curling his fingers in the sheets, or bracing his palms against the headboard. He suddenly can't remember what the last girl he'd slept with had done, what any girl had ever done; he wonders a little frantically if dudes want the dudes they' re fucking to do the same things as girls at all.

"It's totally possible this is the worst sex I've ever had," he says, frustrated, and he feels Pete grin against his neck, then Pete is shifting again, pulling one of Patrick's legs higher, angling his hips up.

"This'll be good," Pete promises, and he--

"Fuck," Patrick says, and Pete does it again, his body rolling against Patrick's more than thrusting, and it's like something just clicks in Patrick's heart and hips. The pressure suddenly goes from weird but okay to, just, awesome, and Pete's stomach provides smooth, sleek friction against his dick as Pete moves. Patrick can feel the intensity of Pete's focus on him even while Pete is nipping at his neck almost playfully, which is just so Pete that something in Patrick's brain chills out, says 'oh, it's you after all,' and it feels right.

"I thought you might like that," Pete says, smug like he'd invented this just so Patrick could feel it.

Patrick has to laugh, breathless, almost soundless, but oh fuck, that feels amazing too. "Shut up, you jerk," he says, and then he moans because he's got it, he's figuring out the rhythm; he catches it and gives it back to Pete with a hip roll of his own. Pete moans too, panting hot against Patrick's neck, and then against his cheek.

"You know you love it," Pete says, voice low and broken in a way Patrick's never heard before. He shifts to get a hand around Patrick's cock, jerking him hard and rough even while they're moving together so smoothly.

Patrick gasps, then curls his hand in Pete's hair, feeling it soft against his fingers, against his cheek. He says, "Yeah, yeah, I do," and tilts Pete's head, kisses Pete like he doesn't ever plan to stop. He comes like that, with Pete smiling against his mouth and it's the best sex, it's the best moment of his entire life.

[identity profile] misspamela.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 05:28 pm (UTC)(link)
I already quoted my favorite parts to you, but YES YAY, so hot and so them and so wonderful.
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[identity profile] dsudis.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 05:43 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, this is so awesomely fantastically THEM, and so hot and YAY.

[identity profile] purelyironic.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 05:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, that was very, very hot. And a wonderful Patrick who can't stop thinking, even when he should be feeling. And then he gets it and it's great. Fantastic.

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 06:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Yay, I'm so glad you liked it. *hugs!*

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 06:08 pm (UTC)(link)
*beams* Thank, Dira! I'm glad you liked it!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 06:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Hurray for hot--I am always panicking about sex scenes. And hurray for Patrick, just because. *G* I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you very much!
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[identity profile] kalpurna.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 06:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh my God, this is so hot! And so in character, and so sweeeeet at the end, oh man. And the bad sex at first, which is such a kink of mine, honestly. I love it. ♥
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[personal profile] birdsflying 2007-07-04 07:30 pm (UTC)(link)
Nrrrgh? Nrrrgh! Awkward and hot, so awesome! It's totally real sex (tm). Did I mention the hot? And the nrrgh? And the awwww?

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 09:27 pm (UTC)(link)
Dude, I love bad/awkward sex scenes, I can't even tell you. I'm reading this chick-lit book a friend gave me and like, sex for 12 hours/17 orgasms, everything is perfect, they're both flawless, and blech. Blech. *grins*

Anyway, glad you liked it! :) Thank you!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-04 09:29 pm (UTC)(link)
Thaaaank you! I'm glad you liked it. I love the hot and awkward myself, particularly with the first time (and totally real makes me happy *G*).
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[identity profile] gigantic.livejournal.com 2007-07-05 12:17 am (UTC)(link)
Oohh, I really like that you were able to just pack so much of them into this short scene. It was awkward and then sexy, and it just worked.

[identity profile] silverakira.livejournal.com 2007-07-05 12:42 am (UTC)(link)
Oh my god. Oh my god this is fantastic, and everything you write makes me flail around like an idiot, but god, I just utterly LOVE your Patrick. I love that it's a little awkward and Patrick doesn't know what to do and that at first it's the worst sex he's ever had. Because, um, YES. And I love how everything clicks for him at the end. I love that you put so much into just 700 words. <3

[identity profile] inkjunket.livejournal.com 2007-07-05 02:00 am (UTC)(link)
Oh man. This completely rocks my socks. This so totally in character; the running of Patrick's thoughts are fabulous and put me completely in the moment... Love! and inarticulate flailing.
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[personal profile] fairestcat 2007-07-05 02:16 am (UTC)(link)
OH, GUH.

This is just... Yes.

So them and so fantastic.

[identity profile] vampyreranger.livejournal.com 2007-07-05 03:36 am (UTC)(link)
This is absolutely phenomenal. I can just *see* this happening in real life. Most of the time RPS feels a bit like a suspension of belief for me but not this fic.

[identity profile] sinden.livejournal.com 2007-07-05 11:36 am (UTC)(link)
You're awesome, you know that, right? ;)

[identity profile] janet-carter.livejournal.com 2007-07-05 12:42 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, yes, that's them.

[identity profile] clare-san.livejournal.com 2007-07-05 01:23 pm (UTC)(link)
yes! Perfect! Also, HOT! But, um, I suspect you already knew that.

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 12:34 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, good, I was nervous I had packed in TOO much! There are times when snippets = overwriting + lack of beta = omg, Gid, what have you done? ;-) I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 12:37 am (UTC)(link)
Heehee! Flailing like an idiot--that makes me SO happy. God knows I spend most of the time I'm writing flailing like an idiot. It's good to share that! *G*

I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you VERY much!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 12:38 am (UTC)(link)
I'm so glad! I'm totally paranoid about characterization and convinced every time I write that THIS time I have failed, so hurray. *G* Thank you so much!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 12:39 am (UTC)(link)
*beams* I'm so glad you thought so! Thank you very much!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 12:40 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, that's the thing with RPS--a lot of time you're throwing belief right out the window the way you don't really do with FPS. But a little bit of believability never hurt no one. *G* I'm so glad you liked it!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 12:42 am (UTC)(link)
Hee, it is NICE to hear that sometimes. I never post fic without that moment of o.O omg what have i done i suuuuuck, so, yeah. *G* Thank you!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 12:42 am (UTC)(link)
Yay! I'm glad you thought so, and thanks so much! :)

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 12:44 am (UTC)(link)
Things that are hot to me =/= hot to anyone else, necessarily. *G* So thank you very much! I'm so glad that you liked it! :)

[identity profile] skyflakes.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 02:52 am (UTC)(link)
This is what I get for clickng friendsfriends on LJ. I stumble on this and this is good. Now, I want more. I don't even know much about FOB.

Any recs? Heh.

[identity profile] hulga828.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 03:16 am (UTC)(link)
Oooo, what a lovely present to come home to! This was the perfect mixture of sweet and hot!

[identity profile] sinden.livejournal.com 2007-07-06 10:10 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, I know that feeling. it sucks, but your writing definitely doesn't. ;)

[identity profile] special-trille.livejournal.com 2007-07-07 12:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Now that is completely awesome! *hearts fic long time*
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[personal profile] nafs 2007-07-08 01:31 pm (UTC)(link)
This was great! Short and perfect, showing layers to Pete and Patrick without saying very much at all :)

[identity profile] jadziadrgnrdr.livejournal.com 2007-07-18 11:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Hot and all the sweet Peterick as beffies happiness thrown in! Brava!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-18 11:18 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, hurray for stumbling across things you like. Thank you very much!

My favorite way to find fic I may have missed/get a good idea of quality is to go to Del.icio.us and search for Pete/Patrick--there's a lot of great stuff. And youtube is bandom's best friend, there's TONS of good footage. ;-)

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-18 11:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Hurray for presents indeed! I'm so glad that you liked it. :) Thank you very much!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-18 11:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Heee, hurray. I'm glad that you liked it, thank you! :)

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-18 11:21 pm (UTC)(link)
I always feel like short fic has to be packed with goodness, and then I end up overwriting and wrecking things. *rolls eyes at self* But this one worked for me, and I'm glad it worked for you too. :) Thanks!

[identity profile] giddygeek.livejournal.com 2007-07-18 11:22 pm (UTC)(link)
They are the beffiest, man, I love that about them. Plus their crazy adorableness and the very awesome hotness of both of them. Bandom wins. ;-) Thank you!

[identity profile] sarren.livejournal.com 2007-07-20 03:09 pm (UTC)(link)
AWESOME

[identity profile] wesleysgirl.livejournal.com 2007-07-30 01:25 am (UTC)(link)
Oh geez, this is so good. Whew. :-)

[identity profile] ladyrogueevie.livejournal.com 2007-09-02 12:31 am (UTC)(link)
how can something this short be so utterly amazing? and Patrick overthinking, and then "oh, it's you after all", and my heart. i'd do that little heart sign if i knew how, but here. <3. that's the best i can do , but you deserve so much more.

[identity profile] impertinence.livejournal.com 2007-09-30 10:38 pm (UTC)(link)
The sheer levels of BFF-ness in this are joymaking. ♥

[identity profile] riverlight.livejournal.com 2007-10-07 05:42 pm (UTC)(link)
God, this was amazing. How you crammed so much amazingness into something so short I have no idea but MAN. Awesome.
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[identity profile] turloughishere.livejournal.com 2007-10-10 04:57 pm (UTC)(link)
You are made of awesome, do you know that!?!!? This is so awkward and hot and real!
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[personal profile] sperrywink 2007-10-28 10:51 pm (UTC)(link)
So fabulous there are no words.

[identity profile] stungunbilly.livejournal.com 2007-12-30 02:44 am (UTC)(link)
This is made of yes.
And balloons, and maybe the perfect frosting on a really messy, delicious, homemade-from-scratch cupcake.
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[identity profile] gigantic.livejournal.com 2008-03-06 01:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, wow, how did I miss this? This is an awesome view into this moment in their relationship. The nerves, and then Pete reassuring Patrick without even realizing, really. Great ficlet.
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[identity profile] gigantic.livejournal.com 2008-03-06 01:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, wait! Haha, I just saw my old comment above. So now the question becomes, heh, how did I FORGET about this? Reading it a second time was just as good! Hee.

gasp

[identity profile] punk-chick-0182.livejournal.com 2008-03-10 03:23 am (UTC)(link)
***then Pete is shifting again, pulling one of Patrick's legs higher, angling his hips up.
"This'll be good," Pete promises, and he--
"Fuck," Patrick says***

***"I thought you might like that," Pete says, smug like he'd invented this just so Patrick could feel it.
Patrick has to laugh, breathless, almost soundless, but oh fuck, that feels amazing too.***

*is breathless*

YES. Finally, Pete decided to use his mind powers to beam THE TRUTH directly into a fangirls' head and apparently he chose giddygeek. Thank you Pete, for sharing your and Patrick's gay love for all to see. (and giddygeek, obviously)

I love you like burning.Burning.